Week #3 100 Word Challenge

There is a boy named Liam. He was going out with his dad and his brother Jake. While he was walking he found a wet note on the ground. It had a location on it. It said left on Dans pizza right on Vans.They decided to go to the place.When they arrived they saw nothing around two minutes later   purple gas appeared...But age seemed to be going backwards... Liam was 12 but now hes 7, his dad was 47 but now hes 35, Jake was 13 but now hes 9. but then someone came and spoke, and the immunition dissapered along with the man. Then all went back to normal.

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  1. HillcrestBlog3October 3, 2018 at 11:54 AM

    Hello hkbartley,
    This is an interesting interpretation of the prompt. I don't understand what 'immunition' is. You would benefit from word processing your story in a 'Word' document first, then copying and pasting it into your blog. 'Word' will help you realize where you have made spelling and grammar mistakes.
    I wonder what the 'someone' said that made things disappear!
    Keep on writing and learning.
    Sincerely,
    Mrs. Van

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